Exedor's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[-NemesiS-]

This was kinda good.

It was way too slow. "Who am I?" Walking... Sitting... Taking hat off... Sitting again... Candle... Taking hat off again... blah...blah...on and on. The video quality was good. The subject might have been interesting, but the pace was way too slow.

Also, it wasn't animated. Please keep the videos on youtube. Newgrounds was started as an outlet for people to post their animations. There's been too much video stuff submitted, when it's intended to be a flash site.

You've got animations on here. Please make more. But keep the videos on youtube.

GAMECUBICLE responds:

There are also stopmotion films here on newgrounds, which we all know and love. Which is also not flash.

This movie was shot greenscreen and everything is edited in. Making the entire movie about 90% digital footage and animation, so I don't see a reason why this shouldn't be here.

[BTS 2 Trailer]

Video is for youtube.

Newgrounds is for animation. Now, you've done the Pyroscape games, and they're ok, cuz they're games. Animations and games are what Newgrounds is about. But for full video, please go to youtube.

And be nice to your reviewers. I thought you were ok til I saw you being rude to those below me. Now, not sure. :\ So remember: your reviewers will judge your personality by how you deal with them in your review comments.

Fro responds:

I could explode on you and tell you about 10 ways that you are wrong, but meh, newgrounds has changed. When I submitted these flashes before they won awards and scored into the 4.00 + range. Ignorance is a bliss I suppose.

[Doctor Who 1985 Totl Spjv]

As much as I like Doctor Who...

You have to do more than that. All you did was take the video and run a filter. The NG submit page says: "You may parody existing Flash submissions, but you must use your own artwork and not rip another author's art." So, yeah. You need to do your own work. If you just modify someone else's stuff, it'll get blammed or flagged. :\

:)

HUNT3Rdotme responds:

... Good point ..........

[A Shiny Minecraft tale]

Awesome!

This is great. The medals are cool. But there's a glitch. I got all the tools, and all the weapons, and I missed 2 diamonds. It gave me 1 diamond at the end. I tried again and got 2 diamonds, and it gave me 2 diamonds at the end. I had a hard time getting the last diamond, but when I did, it only gave me the middle diamond at the end. :\ Several tries still got the same result, even after reloading.

wynand responds:

=D thank you kind sir. All fixed now, I'm not really a coder by trade haha =D. Thanks

[Invasion of nemisis Ep1]

Spell checker and grammar checker doesn't cut it.

The flash itself was incomplete and way too slow.

You may have the spelling corrected, but you still have massive grammar errors! Plus, the words may be spelled correctly, but they are the wrong words. The computer can check that the words are correctly spelled, but it cannot know if they are used correctly.

It concerns me that you do not have the ability to judge these things for yourself. I remember that when we were in grade school, we all thought, "we don't have to learn math, because we'll just use calculators!" But now, we all realize that it's much easier to go to the store and be able to figure out that five $5 items will be $25 without having to use a calculator.

Spelling and grammar are the same way. You will be judged by EVERYONE on how you use words and grammar. Friends may just laugh, but employers control your hiring and pay! Bad grammar keeps you from getting the better jobs.

I would suggest you try again to learn correct grammar. It's ok. People will not think poorly of you for trying to re-learn, or brush up on your skills, but they WILL think poorly of you if you know you need improvement, but do nothing about it. Find someone who has good writing, grammar, or speaking skills and ask them, "Hey, you're good at speaking and writing. Would you help me to be better with mine?" See? Easy. No harm, no foul, no shame in asking.

"excuse me ms.hino he will be all yours when i'm done taking his blood pressure, and temperature and he's all yours."

But, to use an example from your flash, when it says, "He's all yours now he recovered faster than most Would giving his severe injuries." It should read, "He's all yours now. He recovered faster than most would, given his severe injuries." Grammar checker doesn't know that "giving" is not the right word. The correct word is "given."

Good luck, man. :)

Punisher33 responds:

i see where your getting at, and i did make improvements, i went through all the grammar issues and did the best i could with limited space. you gotta hit space when the screen turns black, that i can't seem to get rid of. but this is constructive criticism, i'm trying to encourage newgrounders to not copy one another, trying to actually do something nobil on this site so. that's why i chose dragonball z/ sailor moon cross over.

[Fierce Fight]

At last! :D

Why can't all "first flashes" be like this?

Thank you!

I hate it when people submit a first flash, and it's crap. I always said I don't expect them to be perfect, but at least have them be finished, good, interesting, and of decent length. You did all of that with this one.

This is THE example of what a first flash submission should be like.

CroudControl responds:

Thank you, man!

[Neonic Arena (Under Const]

Don't submit unfinished things.

It doesn't matter if you want to show your friends. Ask them over to see it. Don't submit unfinished things to Newgrounds. With a bit more work and time, you could've submitted the finished item, and we could ALL be impressed. Now, you've got people moanin at you because it's incomplete. And rightly so.

Now that this has passed, it'll forever be unfinished because you'll submit the finished item as a separate file, and probably never delete this one.

It's half finished, and will alway be unfinished, and that's not what Newgrounds is for. Don't get impatient like some little kid, and do half a job. Ask your mom to cook your dinner half way. How is it? Not as good as when it's completely done, right?

And before you say anything about me having no flashes, it's because I won't submit things til they're done. You don't see Happyharry or illwillpress submitting half finished things. Neither will I.

It's not bad, it's just not done. And it's so close!

xNosh05x responds:

Oh im sorry when i get off work i will check to see if my friends are home...what they are working? Well let me look at when they have off.....aww shit its all the days i work on well fuck....i know i will upload it on NG that way they can look at it when ever they want. Woo its not finished kinda stated that in the description and even said it was for meh friends not Exedor...But i guess some how he stumbled on my flash. Last time i check though Ng Slogan was "Everything, by Everyone" guess how my flash doesn't fall in the same realm as anything. And i should also inform my parents that im show not "anyone." I also wonder how am i being impatient by sharing my progress to my friends? I guess im just some 23 year old dude sitting in his room getting hard-ons ever time i make a new keyframe. Geez you know what....i should just grab my comp and show my friends ^__^....but first i have to take a hr bus and walk around for about 5hrs. Then i need to call of work so i get my plane tickets so i can go to Arkansas and Cali so i can show them. Seeing as most of my friends aren't tech savvy and such. I could post it on another site like Deviant but i like NG. Oh and your example with my mom? It not like that. It like my mom was making a cake for some friends and ask them to taste the batter. AND I come in taste it and say see shouldn't let her friends taste something that is not done. I mean the cake isn't for me and the batter isn't for me but i guess i could add my 2cent cuz it NG right and it for everyone.....cept me =[. Also when i woke up this more i swear i that i was happy Harry, or Hyuun, or Egorapter, or illwillpress AND OMFG for a second i though i was you. But i guess im not. And these people telling me i should "take pride in my work" and such. I am very proud of this the designs are better so far, the animation is smoother. But i think it because ppl are taking my flash with is the equivalent of a wire frame (not even 5% of the work i need to do.) and compare it to people who been working on flash like pros ( I <3 Yotam). You know what i like? I like when people tell me that they think it needs work or that think its promising. People can moan all the fuck they want...People on NG are looking for fun anyway so they like like to rip on others. But dude you inspired me. -Puts right hand on chest- for this day forth i will no longer submit incomplete flash on an OPEN NETWORK to show MY FRIENDS what i have been working on. Because i don't want my friends to give me SUPPORT on this project because FLASH ISN'T HARD. And i don't have ANY OTHER HOBBIES OR A JOB OR NEED TO BATH. And Thanks to your awesome review for an 1 hr a day worked on flash wire frame not meant for you. I am now motivated to go to all the other people flash that are about 76 frames repeated and tell them how much of my time and other people time they are wasting. I will also find any animator who ending a cartoon with the phase "to be continued" and punch them in the dick! I hope the guy that did "dot dot dot" make a parody this. I dare not attempt to match up to a pro. So thank you Exedor. I am a little more wise for you.... Thank you for reviewing my half ass wire frame undone flash animation made some random not mainstream guy who is doing this in his spare time and just trying to have fun and is wonder why people are pissed that they wasted their time watching flash movies that say that they are incomplete and complaining that they are incomplete (cuz that make sense) -gasp to take deep breath- that why i love the internet its filled with people that have nothing to really do (including me)

XD

[Demanding Patience Ep1]

Not bad, but needs more.

It's not bad. It would be better if you had 3 jokes in an episode. That would make it more like a snack, whereas now it's just a bite. :)

Also, um, I couldn't quite understand what she said. "...I don't something anymore." So that kinda deflated the joke. :\

Still good, though. :)

demandingpatience responds:

I love your suggestions Exedor. I will keep them in mind for future episodes.