Exedor's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Link Adventures Ep. 1]

Please don't submit unfinished things.

I really wish you wouldn't submit unfinished item, though. You have put us in a bind, and here's why:

This animation is a fragment. It's a piece of a story, but it's still just a part or a bit of a flash.

And with unfinished items, the problem is not if it's bad, but rather if it's good. When it's bad, it gets a low score and gets blammed and is forgotten and gone. Done.

If it's a 'good' piece, then people get confused and may pass it. The problem is that then we've got a fragment of a piece of a bit of a flash floating around newgrounds forever, and what's the point of that? That's not what Newgrounds is for.

Newgrounds is for FINISHED items. It's not good to have fragments floating around with people going, '...WTF is this??!?' when they find it. If this passes, it'll be forever unfinished, because you'll submit the finished item as a separate item and we'll have both finished and unfinished items floating around here.

As for this animation and drawings, they do get slightly better, but they still need way too much work, as you said. Any finished animation needs music and sounds, unless the silence is part of the mood.

Please finish your projects and THEN submit them. Please don't submit 'tests'.

Tantran188 responds:

Well excuuuuse me princess
I will one day make this again,
I do believe it will get blammed
but, it was my 100% test flash
part 2 will....
1.be longer
2. have less sloppy sprites
3. Sound we need the sound!
4. a background
5. a better story
6. smoother animations
7. more imagination
8. put more time into.
thank you for understanding
-singed That guy that you blammed =)

[Derek & Kelso Music Video]

Dude! Have you learned nothing?

With all the time you've been on Newgrounds, have you learned nothing? Your highest scoring submission scores in at a 1.12 currently. You're missing the concept, so let me spell it out for you.

If you submit crappy stuff, you will get crappy scores.

Please don't submit crap. If you're going to put time into creating something, why waste it? That makes no sense.

InfamousD responds:

Off all the time you've been newgrounds, what have you submitted that's worthy of being on here? The answer is NOTHING!

If there's one thing I've learned when being on newgrounds it's the fact that they're alot of punks on here who act like a big shot by acting all mean behind a computer screen in their moms basement when they don't have the cahones to say it to their face, what a disgrace.

[My Flash Intro]

It's nice...

But it's nothing more than an intro to nothing. :\

This animation is a fragment. It's a piece of what could eventually be turned into a flash, but for now, it's nothing more than a part or a bit.

The problem is not if it's bad, but rather if it's good. When it's bad, it gets a low score and gets blammed and is forgotten and gone. Done.

If it's a 'good' piece, then people get confused and may pass it. The problem is that then we've got a fragment of a piece of a bit of a flash floating around newgrounds forever, and what's the point of that? That's not what Newgrounds is about.

This isn't bad. I fully expect this to pass, and thus, it'll be forever unfinished, because if you complete this into a flash, you'll submit the finished item as a separate item and we'll have both finished and unfinished items floating around here.

It's not bad. Just, please send thru completed animations. :)

Albastter responds:

Thanks man! Your reviews are interesting to read! I'd like too meet you someday! :D

-Albastter

[Lunarose 1-3]

They're going downhill. :\

The first one was good, but this one lost me.

The beginning music is awful. The doorbell sound effects need to go. The animation is good. The voices are good, but the pink girl needs to lose the accent. She's got a great voice, just not with the accent. It detracts from her character and is annoying. Normally, it's not ok to change a character mid-story, but I give you premission. It's ok. Go for it. Really. Have someone cast 'AccentGone' so she talks normally. :)

The story was good. But the characters' relationships and orientations were incredibly confusing in this episode. First they seemed married. Then no one seemed married, and they all seeemed to be going for other people. Then they all seemed gay. When the bad guy licked the blood off the slut, that was nasty. You crossed the line with that one. Not cool.

When I saw the first episode, I was looking forward to the next one. After watching this one, that's no longer the case. I hope improvement is coming.

Crintleod responds:

I changed the intro. Hopefully it's not as bad...

Changing the doorbell sound effects is too much of a hassle, but I will turn the volume of them down in future episodes.

The pink girl's accent does not detract from her character and I will not be getting rid of it.

The pink girl and the orange boy are the only ones married. THe rest is all joking around. I guess that can be confusing though...

The guy who licks the blood is the villain. His action being gross is kinda the point.

[FMA- Let it all out]

The Flash Portal is for animations.

This isn't an animation. It's a picture that you didn't make. It has music that should go to the Audio Portal, but you didn't make that either, so it would still count as stolen if you posted it there.

Don't submit things you didn't make.
Stop submitting things that are designed to get low scores. All your stuff has scores of less than 2. Is that how you want it? If you can do better, then DO BETTER! If you can't, then stop submitting things.

TheLightning responds:

I have no idea if you will read this or care, but I was young and new with flash. I agree with you, but again when I did this I wasn't as "good" as other people. I would love to make something people would watch all the time.

[Shuma VS Kaneda]

It looks good, but it's unfinished.

Or it's too short. It's a fragment of a flash, and this causes problems. :\

The problem is not if it's bad, the problem is if it's good. If it's bad, then it gets a bad score, gets deleted and goes away. Done. End of story.

But if it's good, it may pass. If that happens, then we have a part of a bit of a piece of a flash floating around here forever. It never finishes itself as it grows up. It stays as a fragment forever.

For that reason, please don't submit tests or unfinished things. I fully believe this will pass, and so we'll have another flash part floating around Newgrounds forever. :\

Sirogu-san responds:

Im sorry for sending this in unfinished..i was very excited about what i did and thought "HEY,i should upload this to newgrounds it'll be my first submission :D"...
and you have a point..eheh..it doesn't look like its either too short or unfinished so the next time i send this or anything else i do in..they'll all be finished.thank you very much for your review

[Chaos World:The Bridge]

DOOD!!! :\

Well, it's obvious that you're detemined to continue making these. :\ To my surprise, and contrary to what others have done with this medium, it even appears as though you might be reading reviews and actually making a nice effort to improve. O_o Well, then let me try to help with some suggestions.

1. Use lots of lights, and get away from windows if possible. Watch your vid. Notice how the light is flickering? That's the wind blowing the trees outside. It varies the shadows coming thru the window. You may not be able to tell in the room, but the video captures and enhances the effect in a bad way. Use lots of lights- and don't move them- and your lighting will always be consistant. Consistancy is quality in stop-motion.

2. Stop the movement!. Although you TRY to keep the camera steady, the video proves that it's impossible. Tape your camera in place. If you have a small tri-pod, tape the tri-pod in place and tighten any adjustments so that NOTHING moves. When your camera angle and position don't fluctuate, your your video becomes steady and clean. If the camera moves slightly when you push the button, put the timer on for 2 seconds. (Mine has an option for 2, 5, or 10 seconds. The 2 second setting is for this purpose.) Push the button, and the timer will start which gives you time to let go of the camera and for it to stop moving before it snaps the picture. Then, proceed as normal to the next frame.

3. Make a background and be aware of what's visible in-camera. In "FIGHT" you did this on the kitchen table. Good for decent lighting, but bad for videos. We can see your kitchen, we can see people walking in the background, your little brother even came to watch you work. In "The stuff of random," you had junk on the table. Your character walked into a wire that was on the table, and you didn't even move it; he just walked along with it. That's sloppy work. So: make a background. You can open a cardboard box, tape it to the table, and even put plants, pictures, toys, drawings, a shrubbery, and other things on it to make some scenery for your film. Then, be aware of what's visible. If you make a background, but you point the camera to the side, what good does it do? You still end up with us seeing your Dad sitting in front of the TV in the background of your moonscape.

4. Remove things that don't belong. A pencil sharpener? Plates for dinner? Computer cords? If these are not part of your story, remove them. You can hide them behind your scenery.

5. Make a story and take more than a day to finish it. Have a story in mind before you start filming. If you make a story and fully finish the project in a few hours, your score will indicate that. Don't make it up as you go along. It can be a generic story too, but have one in mind. Here's a story idea for you: Guy saves Girl from the "Bad Guys." Now, you have to decide the rest. Does it happen on the moon? Does it happen in the olden days? Maybe it starts in the olden days, then goes to the moon, then stops in the future, and ends up at the bottom of the sea in Legoland! It's all up to you.

I hope these suggestions help you to understand the process a little better. You'll make better videos when you keep these things in mind.

:)

MacBoxProductions responds:

Thanks for taking the time to make that list of tips :)

[Kawaii Battle Stars]

The animation and concept are good.

The voices are bad. This has potential to be great, but the voices ruin it. I know you are going for zany, craziness, but the voices are all SO annoying that it really makes it unenjoyable and hard to follow. Using men for women's voices wasn't a good choice in this one. The volume suffers occasionally as well. Go watch any "Girlchan in Paradise" by Egoraptor for some examples of how to do it right. :)

I suppose that's the reason it got blammed the other day, which surprised me. With all the crap that makes it thru the Portal, I was SO surprised when I was it on the Obituary list.

AxelTheNavy responds:

It actually had a high 3, I think 3.52. I removed it because I had alot of bugs to fix/tweak.
Also I liked the voices, but i respect your view as well as understand where your coming from.
I put this up knowing it would be compared to Girlchan but It's because It's meant to be a take of magical girl shows like Sailor moon etc.

[SPUD - Part 1]

Awesome!

Awesome story, animations, voice acting, and message.

This was great. Although, when he got knocked out of the sky with the tranquilizer dart, that part wasn't as noticeable as it could be. I figured it out though.

Not many flashes get a 10 from me, so that's saying something. Great one, and can't wait til the next one.

Now I'm off to watch your others. :)

nahtanojmal responds:

Thank you

[Archaeopteryx]

How the birds came...

Easy. Female birds have big BREASTS!! XD

golfinho responds:

noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!!!! nop