Exedor's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[The Train's Dispatcher]

$700?!

Go to ebay and look for it there. Or look for an older version. Or better yet, look for an older version of Flash. Avoid the Academic/Student/Education versions, as you need a student code to activate them. They're cheaper for a reason, so don't get burned. :\

Look for Adobe Flash CS4, CS3, CS2, Macromedia Flash MX 2004, and/or Flash MX, which is what I got. I've got tips and tutorial links in my most recent news post in my profile. That'll get that watermark off your work, and watermarks kill your scores.

dRUnkEnApE responds:

Flash is not very expensive and I have a copy. Toon Boom Animate 2, which is very nifty, is $700. The main feature that I really enjoy that is not built into flash is camera and depth control. In Animate, you can control the camera, zoom it, shake it, and add depth to the layers so they move with the camera.

[#1209]

This was pretty good! I like the twist. If more 'first attempts' were like this, Newgrounds would be a much better place.

The walk cycle was a bit off. The rear leg didn't go back far enough, so it looked like he should fall backward at any moment. See my most recent news post in my profile for some info about tutorials and stuff. Jazza makes great tutorials, and has two specifically dealing with drawing effective walk cycles. The link for his tutorials are in that post, and they should be helpful.

Fwiller responds:

I actually submitted this to NewGrounds because of Jazza's channel. I know I still have much to learn though. Seriously, thanks for the feedback.

[The Legend of Blue Ep.1]

The music was sweet!

But that's really all I can say about this one. The credits (beginning and end) take up 22 seconds of a 34 second animation, and that's bad. That's over 60% credits.

The animation needs a lot more of just about everything before you try again. Asking what happens next is a cheater's way of saying, "I've got no ideas." To combat this, you need your Dumping Grounds, and the forums.

This isn't the place for this. The Portal is for good, finished items only. The Forums are what you want. Load this into your Dumping Grounds. It's the third icon from the left at the very top of the page when you're signed in. It looks like a bucket with an arrow pointing down. Once it's loaded there, copy and paste the link into the Forums (Community>Forums). That way, people see it and give tips, which is what you want, but it's not in the Portal, filling your account with low scores or blams, which you don't want.

Also, you can go to the most recent news post in my profile. I've got info there on tutorials and other tips that may help.

Good luck!

AerionsRealm responds:

Thanks so much. I know I was short on ideas. I am new to newgrounds and your comment has helped a lot! Thanks.

[Youtube Intro- Subscribe!]

Why would we want to subscribe on youtube when we can just stay here and follow you here?

As for this animation, it was more like a slideshow.

So, yeah, submit your animation work here. That's what Newgrounds is for. You might want to up your game on the animation part of it, though. :)

KingTheTurtle responds:

Thanks for the input.

I made this in a hurry, and I don't think it's my best work unfortunately. I'm working on something right now and I want to take ALOT of time on it and make it my best work to show people.

[Blue Blob]

Please don't submit tests to the Portal. This isn't the place for this. The Portal is for finished items only. The Forums are what you want. Load this into your Dumping Grounds. It's the third icon from the left at the very top of the page when you're signed in. It looks like a bucket with an arrow pointing down. Once it's loaded there, copy and paste the link into the Forums (Community>Forums). That way, people see it and give tips, which is what you want, but it's not in the Portal, filling your account with low scores or blams, which you don't want.

http://www.newgrounds.com/wiki/help-i nformation/content-submission

Good luck!

Dreader6 responds:

thank you

[TRACING ART - MAUU WIP]

What you have is pretty good, but there's not enough to it. It's still incomplete.

Please don't submit tests to the Portal. This isn't the place for this. The Portal is for finished items only. The Forums are what you want. Load this into your Dumping Grounds. It's the third icon from the left at the very top of the page when you're signed in. It looks like a bucket with an arrow pointing down. Once it's loaded there, copy and paste the link into the Forums (Community>Forums). That way, people see it and give tips, which is what you want, but it's not in the Portal, filling your account with low scores or blams, which you don't want.

http://www.newgrounds.com/wiki/help-i nformation/content-submission

Good luck!

tulextreme responds:

Thank you dear friend! I`ll move it to the right section them! All the best!

[SS sneak preview]

Please read the Newgrounds rules on the submit page:

"Your submission must not be a pointless "demo" or "preview" without any redeeming qualities."

"Do not submit pictures in a slide show format with no interactivity."

I know you're anxious to submit something, but please make it good, and fully complete it before submitting. That's what I've been telling you since the beginning. I really want to see something good come thru from you, but you keep submitting parts and bits and I'm not sure what to think any more. C'mon, man! :D

HereWiiGoAgain responds:

Dude, I can actually promise you this time! This is going to be a real full length animation! Its a very HUGE and very complex story with lots of interesting and original characters!

The script is written, my pot of coffee is made and I am fully prepared to stay up all day and night everyday until its finished! I am going to pour all of my attention and focus into this one project even though I have like 10 different projects I am working on at the same time. I am going to put everything else I am doing on hold because I really believe in this one man. Its a sure thing! You'll see man! Wait until you see the "EXTENDED PREVIEW" with full colors and actual animations! Check out my deviant art for my wicked art skills man! I'm the real deal dude, you'll see! :)

[Lm:2 Weegee's Manshaun?]

The credits are 60% of the submission.

brittyxkitty responds:

Sorry about that. Just wanted to make sure everyone on set got proper credit and recognition.

[Preview of Xionic&Madness]

If your intention is to 'honor' someone, it's best to have your submission be as good as it can possibly be before submitting it. Unfortunately, this was not really good at all. Especially compared to Krinkels and Xionico. Remember, you're trying to honor them, not embarrass them. make it great before you submit anything.

daniel405 responds:

I know it is not as good as yours, so I'm practicing to make them better.

I said it is my first animation, so expect these views ...

I know puedem be an insult to those who like the videos krinkels see this but it was done with malicious intent.

The next to go up, I will try to be better.

[Mucul and Flexibility]

Muscles and flexibility... muscles move the body, and flexibility is how the body moves... and yet there was NO movement in this animation. That doesn't make a lot of sense.

Your spelling needs a workout, as it's pretty weak.

Your knowledge of anatomy is on par with your spelling and pronunciation.

"Quadropecs" ...? Did you mean 'Quadriceps?' Quad-ri-ceps

"Trapezus"? Trapezius ...you spelled it right. It's correctly diagrammed too. Trap-ease-ee-us

"Latissimus Dorsi" Wrong. They're not in the middle back, they're at the sides, and are sometimes referred to as 'wings.' Lattice-sim-us Door-si (psi/pie/cry/die)

"Petroalis" These are the large muscles of the chest, called 'Pecs' for short, and are pronounced: Peck-tor-al-is. They do not go above the collar bone, as your drawing suggests.

Deltoids. That red you drew is actually not muscle, it's your collar bones. Deltoids are the whole "ball" of muscles (front, side, rear) where the arm attaches to the shoulder.

"Gastronemis" You slaughtered that pronunciation. Gastrocnemius = Gassed-rock-knee-me-us. You drew it correctly.

Tendons connect muscle to bone.

Ligaments do NOT hold things together like a glue. They connect bone to bone.

Bloody awful. Please pay more attention to your studies and less attention to your priapism.

Google it, Sparky.

xlZancolx responds:

Listing things is a good way of making some one mad, insults along not-so-helpful "corrections" is a really good way to make me mad. Encase you didn't notice half the claims that you've stated is taking what I said and specifying them. If you want to look like a smart tough guy for all your little buddies on this site then do it somewhere else. I'm right, I know what's in the damn animation, and I am for one not proclaiming this to be a Vincent-Fucking-Van Gogh. One last thing to clarify for your "Bloody" ass is that I got a perfect grade for this, it's not to be pretty or perfect, it just get's the job done. If you failed to notice that then it really shows a lot about your character, "Sparky." So you can go bite the big one because I don't need to read any constructive criticism that doesn't even help me. You punk ass bitch.