Exedor's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[JOTA: EnigmaUO (Part I)]

Actually, it wasn't bad. It was short, and there are some things that need attending to, but it wasn't bad.

Since the redesign, preloaders don't work in Internet Explorer 8. All we see is a black box with a small white icon in the upper left corner. Then once loaded, you get the preloader end and a play button, if equipped. That could account for some of the votes, as some people don't know about the preloader troubles, and assume that the black box means it's broken.

Once it started and the menu came up, I didn't know how to start it. I clicked on the words and nothing happened. Then I clicked on the square and it started. The square is rather small. If someone clicked on the words like I did, they might've thought it was broken. It would be a benefit to have the buttons look a bit more button-like, and be larger. The titles also threw me off before I realized they were 'stylized' titles. Story = play, Scribes = credits, and Domain = Visit Our Website.

As I said, the story was short, which is not bad, but does affect your score. The biggest issue I have with it is the words. The words were small and the color wasn't set off from the background, so it was hard to read. Place a dark background bar behind light lettering for maximum contrast and readability; and vice versa for dark lettering. Reading your lines in a relaxed voice will allow you to better estimate how long it'll take for people to read the lines before you move on to the next ones.

Hope that helps.

:)

Wasteland responds:

Thank you for the thoughtful review.

I'm sorry about the small buttons and I agree the words aren't the easiest to read.
I placed the text in the flash, exactly how it is displayed in the game " Ultima Online"
but I should of used better font color that stood out perhaps. Also yes, the pacing was a bit fast .
Any future flash I submit in the future here will definitely fix all of these issues.

Again, thanks for taking the time out to review it!

[lights out]

If you made it in a few minutes, it's probably best not to submit it. What you have is good, but there's not enough to it.

Please don't submit tests to the Portal. This isn't the place for this. The Portal is for finished items only. The Forums are what you want. Load this into your Dumping Grounds. It's the third icon from the left at the very top of the page when you're signed in. It looks like a bucket with an arrow pointing down. Once it's loaded there, copy and paste the link into the Forums (Community>Forums). That way, people see it and give tips, which is what you want, but it's not in the Portal, filling your account with low scores or blams, which you don't want.

http://www.newgrounds.com/wiki/he lp-information/content-submission

Good luck! :)

Also, go to my most recent news post for tutorials and other tips that may be helpful. :)

deathapus responds:

It was my first time submitting something so I just wanted to see if it would work,I didn't thing anyone would actually watch them like my youtube videos so I did not put much time and effort into it.

[The Forgotten]

Yes, it was rough. The story, however, made up for it. Touching.

I've got tips and tutorials in my news post that might be helpful. Keep improving, and I look forward to seeing good stuff from you! :)

Dreader6 responds:

thanks mate. i hope to continue doing this. at the moment im doing it on my schools laptop. my computer cant do really much of anything so if i ever get a new one i'd do more that are more polished.

[The Bombly Bimbly - Intro]

What you have is good, but there's not enough to it yet.

But, this isn't the place for this. The Portal is for finished items only. The Forums are what you want. Load this into your Dumping Grounds. It's the third icon from the left at the very top of the page when you're signed in. It looks like a bucket with an arrow pointing down. Once it's loaded there, copy and paste the link into the Forums (Community>Forums). That way, people see it and give tips, which is what you want, but it's not in the Portal, filling your account with low scores or blams, which you don't want.

Good luck! :)

Also, go to my most recent news post for tutorials and other tips that may be helpful. :)

KoalaPhoenix responds:

Thank you so much for your helpful feedback! I'm fairly new to Newgrounds and the animating scene in general. I was worried the first comment would be someone bluntly insulting me; thank you for taking the time to offer advice!

[GENERIC ANIME:EPISODE 2..]

This was much better than the first one. The humor is still on the edge of being genuinely funny; sometimes inside, but sometimes outside that edge. Sometimes, the 'yelling' voiced lines were such that they were hard to understand. Still a slight improvement over the original, though.

thebreadandbutter responds:

thank you :) It means alot to me that someone acually cares to point out the flaws of the animation.

[My first Animation]

All you did was cut pics out of various videos and run them thru photoshop filters to change the look, just like your "artwork." While I like the music, and this is kinda cool, I'd much rather see you do some real animation and stop it with these noob tricks.

Please animate something of your own.

Belthagor responds:

http://www.newgrounds.com/art/view/belthagor/more-miscellaneous-artwork

if only I could animate this well....

by the way almost all of my artwork is drawn, please dont knock on it.

[Nyan cat]

This is ok. But this has been done many times already.

[MEGAMAN HARLEM SHAKE]

The only thing I didn't like about this one was that you left the music going while they beat him. Otherwise, oh yeah. :)

rozhvector responds:

thanks for the review

[Battle: FJ [test_01]]

This isn't much of a game. It's also not much of an animation. It's just a screen capture from RPG Maker. :\

Please don't submit tests to the Portal. This isn't the place for this. The Portal is for finished items only. The Forums are what you want. Load this into your Dumping Grounds. It's the third icon from the left at the very top of the page when you're signed in. It looks like a bucket with an arrow pointing down. Once it's loaded there, copy and paste the link into the Forums (Community>Forums). That way, people see it and give tips, which is what you want, but it's not in the Portal, filling your account with low scores or blams, which you don't want.

http://www.newgrounds.com/wiki/help-i nformation/content-submission

Good luck! :)

GameVeloper responds:

Thanks!
We'll submit our vids to YouTube!

[Late Madness MLP version]

Actually, I liked this!

The song was nice. the flash was kinda creepy. And as someone who's trying to learn Japanese, the song was slow enough that I could actually pick out a few words. I also appreciated them written at the top.

zenofan1 responds:

I'm very happy you enjoyed it ^_^