Exedor's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[A Telephone Scene]

What you have is good, but there's not enough to it yet.

But, this isn't the place for this. The Portal is for finished items only. The Forums are what you want. Load this into your Dumping Grounds. It's the third icon from the left at the very top of the page when you're signed in. It looks like a bucket with an arrow pointing down. Once it's loaded there, copy and paste the link into the Forums (Community>Forums). That way, people see it and give tips, which is what you want, but it's not in the Portal, filling your account with low scores or blams, which you don't want.

Please complete this out! It looks great so far.

Good luck! :)

[Super Worms]

One thing I try to get across to noobs is: It doesn't ahve to be perfect, but at least make it complete, and put some effort into it."

You did that! This was really great. If all first flashes were like this, Newgrounds would be awesome again!

Decently drawn. Animated well. Great story. Very entertaining.

Well done. You can be proud. :)

[Gamer - Shaping Staff]

Wow! That was quite cool!

[Blossomforth Winks]

What you have is good. There's just not enough to it. It needs a story, characters, music, and magical twinkly sparkles before it can be considered complete.

Please don't submit tests to the Portal. This isn't the place for this. The Portal is for finished items only. The Forums are what you want. Load this into your Dumping Grounds. It's the third icon from the left at the very top of the page when you're signed in. It looks like a bucket with an arrow pointing down. Once it's loaded there, copy and paste the link into the Forums (Community>Forums). That way, people see it and give tips, which is what you want, but it's not in the Portal, filling your account with low scores or blams, which you don't want.

Good luck! :)

....ponies! Woot! (B

RazorSharpFang responds:

Oh! I see. Man, I really wish NG has told me this stuff... I even read the terms and conditions too, but this entire thing is leaving me confuzled. :/ And not because I lack English skills either; I understand the terms and conditions, but I feel that NG assumes you know what you're doing with the interface, and all these ERROR 502 errors aren't helping :/

Thanks for the tip.

[MTV SUCKS!]

Yup. That's about it. :)

[Onirotelepath]

Wow! The only way this could get better is to add the english subtitles into the animation so we don't have to take our eyes off the animation to scroll down and read them. :)

[Slice of #1]

The beginning was boring. Once the girl showed up and some real animation and movement started, then it had some interest. The problem was that there isn't much that's interesting here. This isn't a story. It's an explanation. That's like someone reading you the instruction booklet from a set of shelves.

"This is Pi. First, she opens the box and gathers her tools. Next, she lays out boards A and F. Then, carefully hammering the nail, she installs shelves B, C, D..." See? Just not all that interesting.

Actually, this isn't the best place for this. The Portal is for finished items only. The Forums are what you want. Load this into your Dumping Grounds. It's the third icon from the left at the very top of the page when you're signed in. It looks like a bucket with an arrow pointing down. Once it's loaded there, copy and paste the link into the Forums (Community>Forums). That way, people see it and give tips, which is what you want, but it's not in the Portal, filling your account with low scores or blams, which you don't want.

Good luck! :)

[JOTA: EnigmaUO (Part I)]

Actually, it wasn't bad. It was short, and there are some things that need attending to, but it wasn't bad.

Since the redesign, preloaders don't work in Internet Explorer 8. All we see is a black box with a small white icon in the upper left corner. Then once loaded, you get the preloader end and a play button, if equipped. That could account for some of the votes, as some people don't know about the preloader troubles, and assume that the black box means it's broken.

Once it started and the menu came up, I didn't know how to start it. I clicked on the words and nothing happened. Then I clicked on the square and it started. The square is rather small. If someone clicked on the words like I did, they might've thought it was broken. It would be a benefit to have the buttons look a bit more button-like, and be larger. The titles also threw me off before I realized they were 'stylized' titles. Story = play, Scribes = credits, and Domain = Visit Our Website.

As I said, the story was short, which is not bad, but does affect your score. The biggest issue I have with it is the words. The words were small and the color wasn't set off from the background, so it was hard to read. Place a dark background bar behind light lettering for maximum contrast and readability; and vice versa for dark lettering. Reading your lines in a relaxed voice will allow you to better estimate how long it'll take for people to read the lines before you move on to the next ones.

Hope that helps.

:)

Wasteland responds:

Thank you for the thoughtful review.

I'm sorry about the small buttons and I agree the words aren't the easiest to read.
I placed the text in the flash, exactly how it is displayed in the game " Ultima Online"
but I should of used better font color that stood out perhaps. Also yes, the pacing was a bit fast .
Any future flash I submit in the future here will definitely fix all of these issues.

Again, thanks for taking the time out to review it!

[Cosmic Voyage]

Huge file! Takes forever to load. Once it does, however, that was great! Glad you finished it.

This comment was more to help with people who say it's taking too long. I left this in one window while I did other things in another until the music started.

[lights out]

If you made it in a few minutes, it's probably best not to submit it. What you have is good, but there's not enough to it.

Please don't submit tests to the Portal. This isn't the place for this. The Portal is for finished items only. The Forums are what you want. Load this into your Dumping Grounds. It's the third icon from the left at the very top of the page when you're signed in. It looks like a bucket with an arrow pointing down. Once it's loaded there, copy and paste the link into the Forums (Community>Forums). That way, people see it and give tips, which is what you want, but it's not in the Portal, filling your account with low scores or blams, which you don't want.

http://www.newgrounds.com/wiki/he lp-information/content-submission

Good luck! :)

Also, go to my most recent news post for tutorials and other tips that may be helpful. :)

deathapus responds:

It was my first time submitting something so I just wanted to see if it would work,I didn't thing anyone would actually watch them like my youtube videos so I did not put much time and effort into it.