The idea is great. The looks are great, though dull. The story might be great once I figured it out, but this is way to scattered. I beat the game, and yet, I'm not sure exactly what happened. I found the green thing and won, but I'm not sure why as I don't know what it was. I assume it's anticote, since I saw something about 'poisoned' in a letter. That's all I could read before it went away.
-Add instructions so we have some idea what we're to do before we start.
-The blackouts last too long. They're boring.
-The waking times are too short, although, you had that 10 second thing going, didn't you. That's forgivable, I guess.
-When reading, stop the clock so we can read.
-Not sure what the clock is for, though it's cool. Is it the 10 second counter?
-Needs gumshoe music.
The potential is there, and now that the contest is over, you have the freedom to alter and enhance. Add and tweak and see what you can turn this into. :)